Japanese pro Advice to students – How to draw fenale character’s face from a 3/4 angle 2

Japanese pro Advice to students – How to draw fenale character’s face from a 3/4 angle 2
https://animeartmagazine.com/japanese-pro-advice-to-students-how-to-draw-fenale-characters-face-from-a-3-4-angle2/

Student's drawing

Student's drawing

Teacher's Advice

Teacher's Advice